A strong investment banking resume offers evidence, not just a statement of interest. Saying that you are passionate about finance carries little weight unless your coursework, activities, internships, or personal projects support the claim. Before editing individual bullets, ask what your current resume proves about your academic ability, work ethic, leadership, analytical skills, and interest in transactions.
Review the document from a recruiter’s perspective (this first pass should feel uncomfortably quick) and see whether someone can find your school, graduation date, GPA, experience, and activities within a few seconds. Do your bullets explain what you accomplished, or do they simply list responsibilities? Is there clear evidence that you explored investment banking beyond reading a job description?