A strong investment banking resume is evidence, not a statement of interest. Saying you are passionate about finance carries little weight unless your coursework, activities, internships, or personal projects support the claim. Before editing individual bullets, ask what your current resume proves about your academic ability, work ethic, leadership, analytical skills, and interest in transactions.
Review the document from a recruiter’s perspective. Can someone understand your school, graduation date, grade point average, experience, and activities within a few seconds? Do your bullets explain what you accomplished, or do they merely list responsibilities? Are there obvious signals that you have explored investment banking beyond reading a job description?